Template talk:Editnotices/Page/List of rampage killers

Template-protected edit request on 9 April 2016
Would "their perpetrators - however these entities" to "...their perpetrators – however, these entities..." and removing the comma after "killing" in the last item (and maybe add a comma before "please" in the bolded text at the bottom) be all right? I know it's less important for editnotices to have stylistically perfect punctuation, but it'd be nice.

Me, Myself &#38; I (☮) (talk) 03:36, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Yellow check.svg Partly done: I didn't follow your request exactly. Ping me if you still want something changed. —&thinsp;JJMC89&thinsp; (T·C) 04:57, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
 * No, that's perfect. Thanks so much. Me, Myself &#38; I (☮) (talk) 05:15, 9 April 2016 (UTC)