User:*Byaa42/Northern Rocky Mountains Provincial Park/BCSFU Peer Review

General Info
Whose work are you reviewing?

- Byaa42, James15553, and Eclarim

Link to draft you're reviewing: User:*Byaa42/Northern Rocky Mountains Provincial Park - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Northern Rocky Mountains Provincial Park - Wikipedia

Peer Review
By reading your draft, the overall tone is neutral or unbiased, and the historical aspect of how the park is established is interesting. The article is divided into different sections, making it easier for readers to know what they are examining. Also, the article examines the ecology, climate change influence on the park, and a brief review on the Rocky's Education and Outreach Program (park visitor numbers - students), which provides a decent amount of content for readers. For the article, I would like to learn more on the park's ecology (what are the major wildlife species present in the area?), First Nation usage and/or co-management of the land, and maybe a brief overview of the park's history (excluding how the park is established).

Clarity/Tone

Most of the sentences can be easily understood, and again, it is written in a way that is not persuasive but more fact-based. Some sentences contain grammatical errors (refer to bottom section of this review for an example) and it could be more concise (removing unnecessary text or change in sentence structure).

Structure/Balance

Clear usage of subheadings to differentiate sections of the article, but some of it can be grouped together with a heading if the information is similar to one another. Other content that can be discussed in your article is listed at the bottom of the review.

Sources

The sources used are appropriate as they are from government websites (in this case, it is BC Parks), but more sources can be used in your article so it can be more complete (to discuss various topics instead of a set limited amount of content from BC Parks). One of your sources can be omitted because it discusses the endangered and threatened species in one of the U.S.'s parks, not your provincial park (refer to second paragraph of detailed suggestions/comments).

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A few detailed suggestions or comments to the article is listed below:

In-text citation usage:

 * There should be an in-text citation(s) for some of the sub-heading paragraphs (or sentences in general) and the lead section, as there are only three in-text citations throughout the draft (some of the listed content is not common knowledge). If there is two or more references used in a paragraph or sentence, it should contain the in-text citations so readers can refer to where the information came from. As some paragraphs may contain multiple references, it is important to add the appropriate in-text citations to acknowledge the sources used and its credibility.

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"The E ndanger animals can be found in the park are Canada lynx, Greenback Cutthroat Trout, Mexican Spotted Owl and North American Wolverine."


 * Taken from the "Species at risk in the protected area" sub-section, the listed wildlife species is specific to the Rocky Mountain National Park located in Colorado, U.S., and it does not reflect your article topic (the Northern Rocky Mountains Provincial Park). You should use sources that are based on your article topic because the current excerpt for endangered or threatened species is from an irrelevant source that can mislead readers.

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Reference List:

 * The first reference has been edited into the list, and for consistency, it should be added through the cite button (will be listed into a numerical order with your other references). You can automatically (the easier way to implement references) or manually create in-text citations with the cite button, which will then add it into the reference list. The cite button also allows the re-use of in-text citations, making it easier for you in the drafting and editing phase of the article.

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Other Feedback
Grammar and/or conciseness

ex. "Plants are included with Algae, Lichens, Mosses & Liverworts, Trees & Shrubs and Wildflowers." - taken from the "Species can be found in the protected area" sub-section.


 * Capitalization should be used for major words like names of people and places. In this case, I would lowercase the words such as, algae, lichens, mosses, etc.
 * If you are deciding to implement the scientific names of any endangered/at risk flora or fauna, the genus is capitalized and the species is lowercased.

Formatting

The "Species at risk in the protected area" and "Species can be found in the protected area" sub-sections could be combined into one whole section, as they both reflect the ecology of the Northern Rocky Mountains Provincial Park.

Content


 * If possible, you can add more information in existing sections, and create new topic(s) in the article such as, climatology (how does it influence flora and fauna?) or any Indigenous communities present in the area (and how they are involved in co-management in the park).
 * Adding links to other Wikipedia articles or external sites.
 * Images can be added if it follows Wikipedia's guidelines.