User:*Byaa42/Northern Rocky Mountains Provincial Park/SophiaSnobelen Peer Review

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Byaa42/Northern Rocky Mountains Provincial Park
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 * User:*Byaa42/Northern Rocky Mountains Provincial Park
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 * Northern Rocky Mountains Provincial Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
I enjoyed reading about how climate change could impact the park and the species living it in the future. I would say this is the strongest section you have so far! If you are able to find it, more information on how this will impact important species, such as the species at risk in the park that you listed, would be good to include as well.

The information relating to how more plants than animal species as altitude increases was good information to include. If available, more detail such as what species are found at different elevations and why or how these species interact might be good to include.

If available, try to include information relating to current or past Indigenous involvement in the creation and/or management of the park. Including information on what Nations traditional land the park is situated on and whether or not the land was ceded/is under treaty could be included as well. Based on the rubric this seems to be the biggest information gap in your draft.

It was interesting to learn that this area is frequented by students, very relatable as a student studying ecology! I also learned some basic information relating to the park, its location/climate and how this currently and will continue to affect the species that are found here.

The draft article does address five of the listed topics (again more detail would strengthen the article).

A neutral tone was used throughout the article. The draft article is also well structured and balanced. Good work here!

Some spelling/grammar/tense errors throughout the draft, make sure you do a thorough proofread. For example, you said endanger animals, but the correct term is endangered animals. Also, you said ‘increasing the attitude’, I assumed you meant ‘altitude’ here.

Overall good information has been included in your draft, but more detail on all of the topics you have included so far would elevate the article. Make sure you are citing ALL of the information you include in your article, sourced from quality peer-reviewed articles or authorized government sites etc.