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Activity 2 - From Scratch

Find an article on a topic that you are interested in or are knowledgeable about. Have a look at the first substantial edit on that page through its revision history.

If you had created this article first - what would you have done differently? If you were the second reader, how would you have edited the article? Write up your thoughts on your user page (100-200 words is plenty).

Original page： https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Casablanca_(film)&oldid=5852594

Original part：

Characters[编辑]
Roger Ebert has said that the film is popular because "the people in it are all so good". As the Resistance hero, Laszlo is ostensibly the most good, although Ebert comments that he is so stiff that he is hard to like. The goodness of the other main characters is one which they come to in the course of the film. Renault begins the film as a collaborator with the Nazis, who extorts sexual favours from refugees and has Ugarte killed in custody. Rick, according to Rudy Behlmer, is "not a hero, ... not a bad guy": he does what is necessary to get along with the authorities and "sticks his neck out for nobody". Even Ilsa, the least active of the main characters, is "caught in the emotional struggle" over which man she really loves. By the end of the film, however, "everyone's being noble" (Behlmer).

Rewrite part：

Characters[编辑]
Rick, who seems to be extremely self-interested, who claims to never "stick out my neck" for others, is holding a gun and forcing Renault Captain to arrange for Victor and Ilsa to leave Casablanca. German officer When he came to a stop the plane from taking off, he did not hesitate to give the German a shot; as for the consequences of this gun, he was very clear.

In Captain Renault's words: Rick's sensibility is hidden under his icy shell, which is the protection he created for his emotional damage, perhaps the result of his crushing for the ideal of justice. Then Rick hid in it and stood idly by. However, the real Rick will listen to the sounds in his heart and eventually return to the "battlefield."