User:0703jiveyjane/Hashimoto's thyroiditis/Drostinatorr Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(0703jiveyjane)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:0703jiveyjane/Hashimoto's_thyroiditis?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hashimoto's thyroiditis

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:


 * We think Secular trends were a great lead to add for this topic

Content:


 * Last paragraph for Geographic Influence: after Iodine Deficiency Disorder add (IDD) this way it will be understood what you are referencing later in the paragraph
 * Add links to major/common diseases referenced in article: Multiple Sclerosis, Type1 Diabetes

Tone:


 * Are there statistics that reference underdeveloped versus developed countries?

Sources:


 * We were able to follow the references page very easily. The sub marks of numbers representing what references go where in the article were marked accurately.

We feel you guys did a very great job for this first draft! Well put together with exemplary statistic and input.