User:0703jiveyjane/Hashimoto's thyroiditis/Eierscj6816 Peer Review

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Good job with including an analysis of multiple trend angles and having an opening statement. My only suggestion is putting in an additional connecting phrase between your opener and the Personal Characteristic Trends. The content is relevant and well organized. A couple of suggestions I have are to include some of the ways in which data may be skewed and some examples of how to safely change someone’s diet to help treat the disease. Then most possible questions that could arise from your current article, should be answered. All sources seem reliable and all the links within your article works. I don’t see any persuasion or non-neutral language. Overall, this article is well written and equally presents all epidemiological trends.