User:0703jiveyjane/Hashimoto's thyroiditis/Hotmamallama Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

0703jiveyjane


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:0703jiveyjane/Hashimoto's_thyroiditis?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hashimoto's thyroiditis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

§  We think Secular trends were a great lead to add for this topic

Content:

§  Last paragraph for Geographic Influence: after Iodine Deficiency Disorder add (IDD) this way it will be understood what you are referencing later in the paragraph

§  Add links to major/common diseases referenced in article: Multiple Sclerosis, Type1 Diabetes

Tone:

§  Are there statistics that reference underdeveloped versus developed countries?

Sources:

§  We were able to follow the references page very easily. The sub marks of numbers representing what references go where in the article were marked accurately.

We feel you guys did a very great job for this first draft! Well put together with exemplary statistic and input 