User:1013-kate/archive

My Project
List two:
 * Great Lakes
 * Water pollution
 * Environmental movement
 * Ecology
 * Green movement

List one:
 * Environmental science
 * Lake Superior
 * Ecosystem
 * Lentic system ecology
 * Pollution

Great Lakes Areas of Concern The Great Lakes are under attack from the many harmful chemicals and people that live and vacation in the area. Preservation attempts are being made by the US and Canada but the issue should be made more public since it is the public that is causing much of the damage. Much of the area's aquatic life is at risk and each lake has a different and delicate ecosystem that needs to be maintained. Because of this, the task of preserving them is difficult. There are a total of 43 areas that are designated as areas of concern and this number is far to high. 128.101.211.210 03:45, 16 April 2007 (UTC)


 * Thoughts from Josh. Kate, this sounds like a good project. I see there is already a stub article up there, so I've edited your project proposal to link to it. This is a very technical project, and you will presumably be looking at a lot of dense government documents related to the regulatory mechanisms for the AOCs. Have you started poking around for research material yet? My main concern is that you take care in your article not to duplicate general information that what would be better covered elsewhere. For example, if you're writing about Sheboygan River as part of your paper, try to stay focused on why Sheboygan is part of the AOCs and what the status is on cleanup, rather than on general information already covered in the Sheboygan River article. So it will be a little tricky navigating that. But overall I think this sounds like a great project. If you have any questions about your project proposal, write me a note here, and write "QUESTION FOR JOSH" in the edit summary box when you hit the "save page" button. I'll stop by later to answer.  1013-josh 21:02, 17 April 2007 (UTC)
 * p.s. Remember to be logged in when you sign your name, so that your signature shows up as your user id and not as an ip address.

Workshop: Great Lakes Areas of Concern
Workshop Guidelines

Discussions

Hey Kate. Here are three links for the editing part of the project. These links go to your group members' talk pages FOR THEIR ARTICLE. Find your name (Discussion: Kate) and write in that section items that you changed in their article (also you could ask quick questions there, too). 1013-andy 03:36, 29 April 2007 (UTC)


 * Talk:Black Belt (region of Chicago) - Precious
 * Talk:Crocodile Lake National Wildlife Refuge - Andy
 * Talk:Doppler spectroscopy - Dan

Hola Kate. So here's the summary I've got for you after reading your article.
 * Your article has tons of information, and like you've said, there is a lot of imformation out there and it's hard to condense to a certain "frame". There is a lot of information in the article and I believe that it all belongs under the article title.  I liked the diversity of sections that the article has to offer.  The strongest point of the article is that most of the information is really clear and easy to understand; I'm not confused about anything in the article.  Some things I would change/edit: (1) I would suggest expanding the section about What Can You Do.  There is a lot of information on the web and in your references' websites that I think have tons of information; (2) also, just make sure you make a Reference section.  I will be helping with editing and correcting the Footnote and References' formats.  Ask me about anything if you need help in the rest of your paper.  1013-andy 05:28, 29 April 2007 (UTC)

Hi, I've nominated an article you worked on, Great Lakes Areas of Concern, for consideration to appear on the Main Page as part of Did you know. You can see the "hook" for the article at Template talk:Did you know where you can improve it if you see fit. 1013-josh 22:15, 30 April 2007 (UTC)

Hey kate,

I thought you had a good paper with a lot of details. There was clear information that seemed to flow well with your topic. I felt that i kept up with your topic and became more knowledgable by reading your article. You had a few sentences that needed rewording, and a few grammar mistakes but other than that you have a well coming article.1013-precious 04:01, 2 May 2007 (UTC)

...So I'm not sure what y'all have going on with workshop. Am I supposed to comment here? Or over at the article talk page? You seem to be doing a bit of both. I'll respond here. I think this is an excellent choice of topic, and you're on your way to a solid article. I think your delineation of causes and sources of pollution in the "Why Are They Areas of Concern?" section is very strong. A few things: 1. Use more in-text citations (footnotes). Whenever you have a fact or quote that you get from a particular source -- say, for example, that a new invasive species enters the lake every eight months -- throw a footnote up there to point us directly to the source. 2. I think you should bring the Great Lakes Water Quality Agreement up to the top to help you refocus your article as an encyclopedic entry on the Areas of Concern. One of the most important pieces of information for the reader to know right off the bat is WHO has designated these "areas of concern." You're not writing an article about Great Lakes pollution. You're writing an article about a bureacratic/regulatory structure that has been set up to deal with Great Lakes pollution by naming the "areas of concern." So that's a vital piece of information. 3. I think you should cut the "What You Can Do" section, as it is not encyclopedic and doesn't fit within the scope of this article. You could make an argument that it belongs in an article about preventing water pollution, or even Great Lakes water pollution, but that's not what you have here. You have an article focused on the very specific topic of Great Lakes Areas of Concern and the closer you can stick to that topic, the better your article will be. 4. You can also tone down language like "a major problem" to bring it within the WP:NPOV guidelines. Strive for a formal, encyclopedic tone. 5. As you begin to rework your article as an encyclopedic entry on the "Areas of Concern" you will find a lot of necessary information that is missing from this draft. For example, following this link from your references: I see (a) information about the protocol and agreement that established the term AOC, (b) criteria for inclusion in the AOCs, (c) RAP and LaMP management plans, (d) the IJC regulatory body, etc. All of that belongs in your article. Your job is to explain to us how AOCs are defined, regulated, and cleaned up. So you're off to a great start with what you have now, but focus your energies a little more closely on the AOCs and less on Great Lakes pollution in general. Does that make sense? 1013-josh 15:17, 2 May 2007 (UTC)

You're on the Main Page!

Hi Kate, your article is currently featured on the Main Page of Wikipedia in the "Did You Know?" fact box. It will be up there for the next 6+ hours. You may get some strangers stopping by your article as a result, so check the page history. 1013-josh 01:57, 4 May 2007 (UTC)

Final Edits Okay, so I'm finished with contributing to your article and all of your last four sections of the article are completed and correctly formatted. Look at the article's discussion page for a detailed list of what I did. Good luck with the rest! 1013-andy 06:12, 4 May 2007 (UTC)

Participation: Kate
I am finding more infromation for the other members of my group. I will have to add everyone to my watchlist later due to technical difficulties. Last night I read thought everyone's articles and made some minor revisions on grammar and word choice. Today I gave Precious and Andy advice on what I thought of their articles but didn't get to Dan's, his will be later tonight. 1013-kate 17:04, 30 April 2007 (UTC) Last night I gave Dan comments on his article on the disscussion page. 1013-kate 21:36, 1 May 2007 (UTC)

I gave Dan an article about the most Earth like planet found to date that I think would be a good addition to his article. 1013-kate 00:29, 2 May 2007 (UTC)

I found an article for Precious and Andy to help them out. All of these links are on their disscussion pages for the articles. 1013-kate 02:33, 2 May 2007 (UTC)

Homework
My first homework assignment is complete. 128.101.211.210 03:46, 16 April 2007 (UTC)

Josh, I revised the most recent homework assignment becuase I did all external links because I thought that was what we were supposed to do. They are now all internal and are linked to their sites. Sorry about that! 1013-kate 00:16, 17 April 2007 (UTC)


 * no problem. 1013-josh 21:04, 17 April 2007 (UTC)

Josh, I added a sentence to the Brokeback Mountain article. 1013-kate 20:08, 17 April 2007 (UTC)


 * Good work. Remember to add a comment to the edit summary box to make it easier for other users to follow your changes. You may want to add the film page to your watchlist so you can see what becomes of your changes. As you can see here, another user has already edited your sentence. 1013-josh 06:36, 18 April 2007 (UTC)

Josh, I am fine with doing this project on Wikipedia. 1013-kate 19:55, 19 April 2007 (UTC)


 * Okay, great! Let me know at any time if you change your mind and would like to switch to an off-line research assignment. 1013-josh 20:43, 19 April 2007 (UTC)

Josh, the first 300 words of my article is on My Project page. 1013-kate 02:29, 23 April 2007 (UTC)


 * Kate, you're in good shape, but I'd like to see some more sources in the bibliography. Also, you should open the article as a definition of the Great Lakes Areas of Concern, rather than the Great Lakes themselves. You might start with the language that's already up there at the stub. Don't stress out about formatting. I'll help you through it as questions arise, and the model article at User:1013-josh/draft will be a good guide. A few notes: Paragraph breaks and section headers will help you immensely. Instead of using bold text to mark sections, you should create a section header. See the model article for examples. 1013-josh 17:56, 23 April 2007 (UTC)

Josh the first 1000 words are written in My Project Draft.1013-kate 22:53, 26 April 2007 (UTC)


 * Good work. I think you're ready to transfer over to the mainspace. I prepped your draft for the move, and tomorrow I'll help you copy it over. 1013-josh 07:15, 27 April 2007 (UTC)

Hi Josh, Ok I'm thinking my article is as done as it's going to be so I'm turning in my article! 1013-kate 20:19, 9 May 2007 (UTC)

Notes from Josh & the Class
Hey, I just posted some helpful research links; don't miss them! 1013-josh 21:34, 18 April 2007 (UTC)

Hey Kate, I just wanted to let you know that I created a talk page on Precious' article. This is where we could communicate with her (and her with us) about her article.

Follow this link: Talk:Black Belt (region of Chicago) and look for Discussion: Kate. This is where you will ask/answer your/her questions. (this unsigned comment left by user:1013-andy)

Notes from Wikipedians
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