User:1122MW/Florence Goodenough/Piglover19 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

1122MW


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:1122MW/Florence_Goodenough?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Florence Goodenough

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, the information added to the articles flows well into the information already provided in the article. It does not seem like two different people contributed to the same type of information. The lead is already well established, so no change needed to be made in that regard.

The content added is in reference to information already posted, but in further detail which was needed and good information to add. Most of the article talks about her academic carrier and her past life. However, since she is know for her involvement in medicine, I believe this needs to be dived into deeper and more information needs to be provided since it is only mentioned in minimal amounts in this article. Especially since medicine is a topic we discussed during class.

All the resources provided are credible and are from credible, scientific sources. The amount of different citations shows the credibility of this persons work by having multiple points of reference to stray away from biases that could be depicted if one article was used. The only reference I would be cautions of is the fourth reference since it is involving a website ending in .com and minimal information is provided on the source as well. All of the links work which is good for viewers reading the article.

The work holds a neutral tone and no alarms with tone or bias was I able to pick up.

The content is easy to read. It flows like a bibliography of Florence's life starting with early life, to her education, and then to her career. The language and flow within the paragraphs themselves are easy to comprehend due to good sentence structure and appropriate words.

There is little image in this article. Adding pictures of Florence or of her work could add more captivating and inviting information to the article.

Overall, I believe the information provided as improved the article by providing more information to subjects in the article that were quite broad. I believe a point that could help improve the article is adding information about her contributions to medicine especially towards child intelligence which is introduced to us in the lead of the article.