User:1517luther/Norm Charlton/Cmckean02 Peer Review

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I am reviewing 1517luther's work for the Wiki page of Norm Charlton.


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 * Norm Charlton

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In the Early life section, I would edit the sentence " He attended Rice University in Houston, Texas from 1982-1984 playing for coach David Hall, before being drafted by the Montreal Expos with the 28th pick in the first round of the 1984 MLB June Amateur Draft.

" I would change it to, He attended Rice University in Houston, Texas from 1982-1984 playing for coach David Hall, before being drafted by the Montreal Expos with the 28th pick in the first round of the 1984 Major League Baseball June Amateur Draft.

I say this because not everyone knows what MLB means.

While it is also write as "While at Rice, he played baseball for the Rice Owls and set multiple new university records in the sport, including a career ERA of 2.25 and an 11-win season."

I would change the ERA to Earned Run Average, just because those who read on him or baseball in general do not know what that means.

Also have "As of 2018, Charlton lived in Rockport, Texas with his wife and two children. He owned and operated a fishing guide business named Norm's Big League Fishing Adventures.

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His wives should be stated. Just so people are more informed. I do know he has been married twice. Also, add a bit more info on his business, such as when he started the business.

Other than these things, I think that the work you have added in lets people know what he was doing in the past and where he is now.