User:18roo/Lateralization of brain function/TheBrapHeardAroundTheWorld Peer Review

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18roo, Explorepsych, MinnieMollet3, Ph1275
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Hello,

Below, I will review your article and inform you can improve on this article.

I noticed that you don't have a lead paragraph in your article. When you do write a lead paragraph, be sure that it is a brief summary of what will be discussed in the article that is to come. In the paragraph: "Possible Misapplication" I noticed that the paragraph opens with "Proof leading to mythbuster...". I think you could re-write this opening as "Proof that possibly disproves the theory of a 'split brain' might include.". Also in the paragraph: "Counter Position" I noticed you open the paragraph with an objective statement: "While the left/right brain myth is approaching an end.". This statement conflicts with the idea in the previous paragraph that doesn't state that the "split brain" theory is defunct. Instead you could open the paragraph with this instead, "Due to the increased speculation towards the "split brain" theory...". A statement like this one makes sure not to frame speculation as fact. Overall, I think that this is a great start and I look forward to see it improving.