User:1a0a2k6/Camel racing/BrunoSlugo Peer Review

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Lead

The lead provides a brief overview of the topic, but there is not a specific introductory sentence that concisely communicates the article's topic. The second two paragraphs of the lead include information that is not mentioned in the rest of the article, so I suggest creating a separate section about current races and prizes rather than mentioning this information in the lead.

Content

The majority of the evidence in this article is from 2005-2012, so more recent sources should be included. There should be more information regarding the history of camel racing and its relevance today, rather than solely focusing on child jockeys. Adding this information can help contextualize the importance of bans because readers will better understand the scale and relevance of the issue. I think this article deals with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps because this is an underrepresented area and topic.

Tone and Balance

The content is neutral, but some perspectives are underrepresented. For example, it's likely that camel racing has some sort of cultural significance, and it is important to mention what this is in addition to its harms. Perhaps there is an economic impact of camel racing that could be discussed as well. Even though the article focuses heavily on the negative impacts of child jockeys, the tone is objective and does not attempt to persuade readers to adopt a specific perspective.

Sources and References

The links for the sources work, and they are mostly scholarly sources such as books and journal articles. I would suggest adding some more recent news articles or journal articles to portray the relevance of camel racing today, as many factors have likely changed since 2005.

Organization

The content is well-written and does not have spelling or grammar errors. The order of the sections makes sense, but there should be more information about the history of camel racing and its current role.

Images and Media

The images are well-captioned and they enhance readers' understanding of the topic. Specifically, it is helpful to see the juxtaposition of what camel racing looked like in 1878 compared to 2009.

Notability

The article is notable as it is supported by multiple reliable sources independent of the subject. There is likely more literature that could support this topic than is included in the references. The article also links to a variety of other articles, making it more discoverable.