User:20Amayer/John Cohen (musician)/JSchultzJr Peer Review

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JSchultzJr


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 * User:20Amayer/John Cohen (musician)


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 * John Cohen (musician)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think this is a good start but can be better. After looking at the main article I noticed it can be edited and added to in different ways. I feel as though you can really add to his personal life as their is not much there, and you can definitely add more to it. I always feel like you can Format the "Life and career" section better so its not just one large section under one broad title. You may be able to break it up into different sections of his life or a timeline of his life with sub-sections. Another recommendation would be to look at why he chose those publications. Most importantly though if you re format it and reword some areas it would look so much better in the end.

~John Schultz Jr.