User:21RowRowRoYourBoat89/Snakes in mythology/SirLeMonk Peer Review

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"21RowRowRoYourBoat89"


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 * User:21RowRowRoYourBoat89/Snakes in mythology
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Snakes in mythology

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I appreciate the inclusion of a picture, as the original article is severely lacking in that department. The change you made to the lead section is also very nice to help the article seem more generalized rather than purely focused on Hopi culture. While reviewing the main article, I initially had difficulty understanding the information, as there doesn't seem to be a good "overview." Perhaps breaking the lead section up and moving some of that information into new areas could be beneficial. For example, the introduction refers to snakes as "symbols of healing and transformation" and "fertility symbols." Moving these into their own topics might help decongest the introduction. The article is large enough that another picture might help break up the large swath of text, but it's not essential. My last suggestion is regarding the arrangement of the sections of the original article. Shifting "Creation Myths" up and moving "Immortality" above "Snake Gods" might help the flow of the article. I like the changes so far; keep up the excellent work!