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Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * Article title
 * One-sex and two-sex theories


 * Article Evaluation
 * Overall, the article could be developed in several ways. At times, it conflates Laqueur's interpretations in his formulation of the one-sex/two-sex model with historical reality (this is also mentioned on the Talk page), and does not significantly discuss the many critiques which Laqueur's theories received. The citations are also inconsistent, and the sections could be better organized to avoid repeating information. Some possible areas for improvement follow:
 * In the History section, some sentences appear to describe Laqueur's one-sex theory as if it were a historical fact, instead of presenting his theory as an interpretation of historical thinkers' ideas. For instance, the article neglects to mention that Galen's model of female genitalia as inverted male genitalia was actually a mental model used to picture female anatomy rather than an assertion that there was only one sex.
 * This ambiguity between Laqueur's claims and historical reality is also reflected in some sentences in the lead, such as "Prior to the eighteenth century, it was a common belief that women and men represented two different forms of one essential sex"; clarification that this is Laqueur's interpretation could be added.
 * Some information is repeated almost word-for-word between sections and could be limited to just one section.
 * There are contradicting claims, such as "Laqueur argues that philosophers like Aristotle share Galen's views about the one-sex model" immediately followed by "Aristotle was committed to the idea of there being two different sexes," which could use clarification.
 * Many sentences throughout the article are missing citations.


 * Sources
 * Laqueur, Thomas Walter (1990). Making sex : body and gender from the Greeks to Freud. Cambridge, Mass.: Harvard University Press. ISBN 0-674-54349-1 . OCLC 21375348.
 * RAGAB, AHMED (2015). "One, Two, or Many Sexes: Sex Differentiation in Medieval Islamicate Medical Thought". Journal of the History of Sexuality. 24 (3): 428–454. ISSN 1043-4070.

Option 2

 * Article title
 * Pandaka


 * Article Evaluation
 * The article is very short and gives a clear but somewhat short definition of the term pandaka. Although the lead mentions its connections to Buddhism, this is not discussed in the body of the article and could use expansion. Specifically:
 * In addition to Historic context and Modern context, the article could use a section describing Buddhism and the term pandaka specifically.
 * The section Modern context gives only one contemporary reference to the term and could be developed.
 * The citation used for the section Modern context does not link to a specific article, and should be changed or modified along with the Modern context section.


 * Sources
 * Gyatso, Janet (2003-11). "One Plus One Makes Three: Buddhist Gender, Monasticism, and the Law of the Non-excluded Middle". History of Religions. 43 (2): 89–115. doi:10.1086/423006. ISSN 0018-2710.

Option 3

 * Article title
 * Applications of gender performance


 * Article Evaluation
 * The Applications of gender performance section of the Social construction of gender page is written in a slightly argumentative style that may possibly be an editor's own interpretation of the source material. In addition to changing some of the language and adding more citations, this section could possibly also be linked to similar concepts like sex category.
 * I would change the phrasing of the sentence "Thus, Butler perceives gender as being constructed through a set of acts that are said to be in compliance with dominant societal norms", as it reads more like interpretation than exposition, and add additional material from sources as necessary.
 * The entire paragraph following this sentence may also need to be rephrased, as it continues to employ an argumentative tone that does not fit the rest of the article.
 * Beyond this particular section of the article, one talk page thread makes the strong point that much of the article is about Western social constructions of gender, when gender performance as well as ideas of masculinity and femininity vary across different cultures. The article could probably be developed in this respect, with at least a new section on gender constructs in non-Western cultures.


 * Sources
 * Butler, Judith (1988). "Performative Acts and Gender Constitution: An Essay in Phenomenology and Feminist Theory". Theatre Journal. 40 (4): 519–531. doi:10.2307/3207893. ISSN 192-2882.
 * West, Candace; Zimmerman, Don H. (1987). "Doing Gender". Gender and Society. 1 (2): 125–151. ISSN 0891-2432.

Option 4

 * Article title
 * Doing gender


 * Article Evaluation
 * The article gives an overview of the concept of "doing gender" by discussing in large part West and Zimmerman's article "Doing Gender"; however, ambiguity arises in later parts of the article when other authors who write about similar ideas are introduced. As a result, it is unclear whether the article is intended to be about West and Zimmerman's article only or about a broader category of ideas which all relate to "doing gender".
 * The section In the media brings in tangential but not clearly relevant information about gender roles. The information is supplemental to West and Zimmerman's ideas, but is not an explicit response to their article and its inclusion may be confusing; it almost reads like an editor's personal tangent on doing gender in media and video games. It may be worth discussing on the talk page about whether this section should be kept, if the article is strictly about West and Zimmerman's piece.
 * The article ends up bringing in enough different authorities on the idea of "doing gender" that it may be clearer to make this article just about West and Zimmerman's piece (as well as related responses/criticism) then move the tangential references to another page like Social construction of gender.


 * Sources
 * West, Candace; Zimmerman, Don H. (1987). "Doing Gender". Gender and Society. 1 (2): 125–151. ISSN 0891-2432.

Option 5

 * Article title
 * Danmei


 * Article Evaluation
 * The article gives an overview of danmei as an LGBTQ literature and media genre, including a brief overview of its history and characteristics. The language is consistently neutral and citations are frequently used, but some sections such as Audience could possibly be further developed and the lead made a bit more comprehensive. Specifically:
 * The Audience section primarily discusses female fans of danmei, giving somewhat of a one-sided impression, but other published literature suggests that danmei has allowed for the creation of queer online spaces, which may be worth adding.
 * The Media section mentions that published danmei comics are uncommon, but this could be elaborated further with reference to Chinese censorship laws.
 * There is significant overlap between danmei 's origin and Japanese BL, which is referenced in the History section, but could be expanded on and possibly given its own section (with reference to some of the sources below).
 * The lead does not feature any content from the History section, so it might be worth adding a one-line summary of this section to the lead.


 * Sources
 * Yang, Ling; Xu, Yanrui (2016-06). "Danmei, Xianqing, and the making of a queer online public sphere in China". Communication and the Public. 1 (2): 251–256. doi:10.1177/2057047316648661. ISSN 2057-0473.
 * Yang, Ling; Xu, Yanrui (2017-07-10), "Chinese Danmei Fandom and Cultural Globalization from Below", Boys' Love, Cosplay, and Androgynous Idols, Hong Kong University Press, retrieved 2022-10-16