User:5150EditWiki/Death anxiety/Mar2203 Peer Review

Hello again! As I looked over the article again I think that the terror management theory could be shortened as it talks a lot about the religious component of the theory but then there is another section dedicated to the religious beliefs behind death anxiety. Maybe just taking some of the religious content out of the terror management theory can help to make the article less repetitive. I also think what you have in the sandbox for the COVID-19 section of the paper is very strong and will help show how the pandemic affected death anxiety!

Hello! I just read through the article you are reviewing. I think an area that could use a bit of work is the lead, although the start of the lead does give a good introduction it begins to get overly detailed towards the ending when it gets into the diagnosis, how it can affect every day, and how it can be reduced. I think those could be moved somewhere into the body of the article instead of in the lead. I also think the section about measuring death anxiety and fear can be edited. The information in this section is outdated and is based on studies done in 1972 and 1966. Adding some new information to this section could really help make it seem more reliable.

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