User:7ommybo1228/Hou Yaowen/Emmaemmay Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

7ommybo1228


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:7ommybo1228/Hou Yaowen
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hou Yaowen

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead has been largely improved and has provided a brief introduction of Hou Yaowen. The first(introductory) sentence is quite clear and concise.

The content is relevant and up-to-date, with information of his death and his apprentice. I don't see any missing content. I don't think it deals with Wikipedia's equity gaps.

The whole article is written with a neutral tone, no biased statement or persuasion appeared.

All of the sources seem reliable except for the one from baidu doesn't seem like come from the news or any authoritative source. The sources are thorough and relatively current. The links all work well.

The overall content is well-organized and no obvious grammar mistakes.

The images have not been added yet.

In summary, the content has been improved a lot, good job!