User:801johnna/School resource officer/Joshuapak11 Peer Review

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Johnna Spikes (801johnna)
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 * School resource officer

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Hey Johnna!

Just wanted to say how impressed I am with the detailed legend you've put together. It's super clear and easy to follow, making it easy to understand your plans for the article you are going to edit upon soon.

I noticed you haven't quite finalized any drafted changes in your sandbox for this article quite yet. No worries, though! I see you've got some great notes and brainstorming ideas already. We're not aiming to go live with our final sandbox changes until next week, so there's time, but...

One thing I noticed is that you haven't directly added your ideas to specific sections of the article yet. Your thoughts are detailed and relevant to the topic of "School resource officer", but there's nothing for me to compare it to directly correlated from the Wikipedia article. And this is what you are supposed to do up to this point because your edits will be integrated into the relevant areas of the article. Once you do that, I'll come back and take a look to see your brainstorming ideas weaved together within your article as a whole :). Looking forward to seeing your progress!

PS. Here is an example of my Sandbox Draft Changes below -- I have a lot of work to do myself, but this is an example :):

MY LEGEND:

Regular Font: Copied from WIKI Article - Free Clinic

Bold Font: My Edits

Italicized & Underlined: Title of Section

Poverty and physical:

Poverty can affect health outcomes throughout a person's entire life. The affect may not always be expressed while an individual is impoverished. Mothers who are in poverty during their pregnancies may experience more health risks during their delivery, and their newborn may experience more health risks and markedly more behavioral problems during their development. '''In addition, research has shown that low-income families and their children face the most pressing struggles when it comes to receiving medical attention. Since its most recent reauthorization in 2018, the Children’s Health Insurance Program (CHIP) aims at improving healthcare coverage for vulnerable families experiencing homelessness. This includes youth up to 26 years old, pregnant women, and new mothers. The initiatives of eligibility for children up to 26 years old, as well as automatic enrollment at birth, represents a significant step towards enhancing accessibility and effectiveness in providing essential healthcare coverage for new families in this population.'''