User:A1243617202/Expressive language disorder/Mirandafast Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? I am reviewing the work of usernames Mpankey and A1243617202.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing User:A1243617202/Expressive language disorder
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Expressive language disorder
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Expressive language disorder

Evaluate the drafted changes
This original article is about expressive language disorders; it includes a definition of the disorder, how and why these types of disorder arise, the structural / functional problems within the brain that can cause / increase the presence of these issues (as well as the genes affected), and the short- and long-term social and medical effects that this disease has on the people diagnosed.

Overall, there have not been many edits so far on the original article - the sandbox draft showcases the paragraphs I am assuming that they do not want to change as well as outlines titles for content they want to add onto the article. Mpankey suggested the title layouts as well as some other formation change suggestions and A1243617202 revised a small section from the original article.

There is not much to say about the edits as they are very minimal, but I believe that the new layout suggestions will help make the article more cohesive and give the reader a better understanding of expressive language disorders as a medical affliction. After reading the original article, I obtained a lot of information about developmental causes of this disease concerning the brain and genes, but I did not get a good picture of the symptoms of this disorder and how it fully affects the people who are diagnosed with it. The section in the original article about interventions and treatments for this disorder is very small; I would recommend expanding on this more and going into depth about how people are able to live with an expressive langauge disorder. This might be able to go under the prognosis title. I would also go into more detail about the different types of language disorders and what makes each one a unique condition. This might be able to be added to the suggested diagnosis / treatment titles.

The History category was a good idea, as the original article only briefly touches on theory created by Willem Levelt and nothing else. How was it discovered? First cases? If this disorder can be improved upon by certain treatments or any treatments that have been studied to work over time? Besides that, good job everyone!