User:A1c23/Sensory deprivation/Anneracine22 Peer Review

I feel like the sentences don't really follow. You could include introducing sentences to keep the readers' attention and make what will be discussed more obvious and clear. I am assuming that the work is not complete since they is only one paragraph. Therefore, it is hard to point out the positive aspects of the article.

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