User:ALogan21/Draft:Patsy Jo Hilliard/Hcooper799 Peer Review

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In the lead paragraph there are different verb tenses being used. As Hilliard is still alive I suggest writing in present tense.

The content is relevant to the topic and does well to cover the important information and what she is well known for. It does good emphasizing the first African American and first Woman to become a member on the board. Her early life section does not really encompass her early life as it skips from birth straight to graduation. I would attempt to find information on her upbringing or family life.

The content does appear to be written from a neutral point of view. Good job finding a usable picture for her. I was unable to find one which I could utilize of her as they all had copyright issues. Overall there do not appear to be major issues and it seems well put together.