User:AMCL25/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
(Snakes in mythology)

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(I have a fascination with snakes, except for the poisonous ones. Their links to spirituality, life and death, and magic in many cultures make me curious to know why.)

Evaluate the article
(Lead Section: Although there is a hook sentence, it is in the wrong tone. It sounds more like an opinion, and there is no source to back up the information provided. The hook sentence about the snake eyes also seems irrelevant to the rest of the article. There should be an overview of the other paragraphs' topics in the rest of the article so that the reader will know what information will be present. Content: The topics for the sections of the body are well thought out, but multiple quotes need to be appropriately quoted and cited. For example, in the paragraph titled Creation, The quote that begins with "Delighted" is not correctly quoted or cited. The placement of sentences, like the ending sentence in the paragraph titled Immortality, needs to be changed for better flow; however, it is an informative sentence and could be placed in a different part of the paragraph. The tone of the article needs to be neutral. There are too many opinions/controversial views experienced throughout the article, and there needs to be more overall citing of the information provided. The content doesn't seem persuasive, but it does seem to express an opinion as fact. The article requires organizational work and needs to be more precise. Overall Impression: I find the topic interesting, but the information is extensive. For example, " some cultures" is used often. The author should be more specific about the cultures they are discussing and provide secondary sources to support the points made. The article jumps around to multiple points, examples, and cultures, making it harder to follow. It needs organizational tweaking, but there are a lot of good examples to support each topic. The article seems like more of a rough draft than a final draft, but it has the potential to be great.)