User:AMousou/Medium ground finch/Moose1917 Peer Review

General info
Ayahbear127 Fevans9 AMousou/Medium ground finch
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:AMousou/Medium ground finch
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Medium ground finch

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The first part of the lead is pasted and follows closely to the original lead from the wikipedia article on Medium ground finches, and then has a new second paragraph which is descriptive, but is slightly wordy. At the time of this review there is an outline on the path forward regarding the edits to be made. The current outline on the article page for the medium ground finch seems to not be overly wordy and straight forward, and do not expect the group to work on this area in particular. Although, there are some good points that can be added from their list, such as outlining the addition of Habitat and range that appears to be severely lacking.

Content

The listed content is highly relevant to the topic, however, there is a lack of content thus far. The content is up to date in that it references contemporary climate issues that will translate into population changes. This will be a bit ambiguous if there is not exact research done on just this bird species but there are also many studies available that can supplement this. Likewise, the subsection Habitat and range has much data on it for a specific species, and it can be made more up to date with the mention of the urban section of the bullet points

Tone and Balance

There is no content added thus far but the bullet points appear to be mostly neutral. There is heavy emphasis on the bullet points for discussing urban settings, but the other sections are reasonably detailed as well. The only edit I would suggest is to go more into detail about the habitat and range, especially as the original article severely lacks.

Sources and References

No sources have been added so far besides from the links from the copied section. There is likely ample literature on the topic and would recommend looking for the modern literature on this topic as it will help make the wiki article much better (the article only has about 20 sources).

Organization

There is a great organization layout for the article thus far at the bottom of the sandbox. I think this will serve very useful in the development of the article as students become more knowledgable in the species as well. The only critique I have for this section would be to consider making climate change a subsection in the habitat and range, because it is going to be highly specific to this species.

There does not appear to be any grammatical or spelling errors.

Images and Media

None posted thus far. I would suggest brief captions for the images and images for the parasite section to display the interaction between the organisms. The brief section on habitat from the orginal article can be elaborated upon as well with photographs.

Overall Impressions

I definitely believe that the listed content will add dramatically to the article and that there is a lot of great ideas here. There is also a lot of work to be done and think that once more content is made in the draft, we will start seeing the bigger picture.