User:APC04OU/Argentina–Brazil football rivalry/HornNest Peer Review

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I think put your information about the history of women's football right under the "Women's football" heading and follow the same chronological timeline of the history of the men's football.

Try phrasing it like "The governmental ban on women's sports left the Brazilian women's team unable to play professionally, but they still continued to practice (or compete in non-official games)" the way it is phrased right now is a little confusing.

The lead, and the whole article is definetly putitng women's football for this rivalry as an afterthought. As you right, be mindful that the article is not giving a very neutral portrayal of the women's football. Specifically the phrase "... this rivalry does not provide the passion that men's matches encounter yet." comes across as demeaning, rephrasing it like "the Argentina-Brazil football rivalry between the women's teams has not yet reached the level of passion that is seen in the men's matches due to Argentina's lack of an organized women's football league."

If possible add a stats section like the men's team has, but I understand that there might not be that much information to add, it think it is an important step to start making this section equal to the men's section.

Just be mindful of your phrasing and how it may come across. These articles need to be neutral and being neutral in sports can sometimes be difficult, so just have someone proof read your work for neutral language.