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Peer Edits for February Revolution

General Comments: Ensure that your opening sentences accurately summarize what you are trying to say in the paragraph.

February Revolution "1,300 people were killed in the protests" change "in" to "during"

Long-term causes "The causes of this unrest of the common people towards the Tsar and aristocratic landowners are many and can be summarized as the ongoing cruel treatment of peasants by patricians, poor working conditions of city workers in the fledgling industrial economy and the spreading of democratic ideas from the West by political activists, leading to a growing political and social awareness of the lower classes". This is a confusing sentence. Consider breaking into various sentences.

Further citations need to be done for this section.

Short-term causes "Bolshevik Party and specifically Vladimir Lenin" consider revising this with commas

Why is "newly called up" officers in parenthesis? Consider revising this to make sure the right information is in parenthesis

"Like all major armies, Russia's armed forces had inadequate supply" Slightly confusing wording.

Towards the February Revolution I would suggest have an opening sentence that summarizes the paragraph.

Protests What is the Nevsky Prospect? make sure that this is linked.

Tsar return and abdication What units switched allegiance? make sure that you explain everything clearly here.

Should "imperial family" be capitalized?

"In the afternoon at 3 o clock" change to "3 o clock in the afternoon"

Government and Petrograd Soviet share power

When did the provisional government declare itself the governing body?

Citation are further needed in this section.

Overall comments: This article is written very well. It successfully outlines why the revolution occurred, what happened during the revolution, and the aftermath following the revolution. However, I would make sure that everything is properly cited and all information stems from sources.

Additions to Kornilov Affair article

* insert in "Historiography" after first sentence.

World-renowned historian, Mark D. Steinberg, presents the conflicting beliefs and political opinions on the Kornilov Affair. He elaborates by stating that the event was “a strange mixture of conspiracy and confusion". Once the attempt was halted, many citizens expressed skeptical thoughts regarding what actually happened between Kornilov and Kerensky. On the left side, those who defended Kornilov believed that Kerensky had intentionally planned the seize, but publicly disapproved of it in order to be the savior figure in the midst of turmoil. Another aspect that Steinberg highlights is that the right believed that Kerensky had turned against Kornilov. Thus, the opinions regarding this affair further perpetuated separation between the right and left political parties.

When discussing the events that led up to the affair, Steinberg addresses the involvement of a man named Vladimir Lvov. Prior to the affair taking place, Lvov identified himself to Kornilov as an "emissary the prime minister," which was not his accurate occupation. Through his interaction with Kornilov, Lvov gained the knowledge that Kornilov wanted to create a stronger, more unified government where he had more of a voice. Then, Lvov went on to express these desires to Kerensky, but Kerensky viewed this information as a threatening proposal to take over the government. From there, Kerensky prepared to defend the capital against Kornilov's advancing troops and aspirations of gaining power. It can be considered that through communicating with the help of Lvov, the different intentions of both Kornilov and Kerensky were miscommunicated or misrepresented in conversation, which perpetuated the attempted government seize and the confusion surrounding it.