User:Aaashlle/Feature story/SRatty1652 Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead

- clear opening and definition

- somehow needs to incorporate brief intro of main sections that will come

Content

- good job creating a citation for the published features and news

- structuring a feature section was a good edition, but the last paragraph seems to have a citation from a website, but the link doesn't work. Peer reviewed journal with an author probably more reliable

- A lot of the citations come from the same source many of times throughout the article. Would probably be helpful to get more perspectives in there

- David Randall source is a little dated, maybe add more significant content by him to understand why we need a dated source

Tone and Balance

-short article but the tone and balance are good

-as far as organization goes, I think it is very easy to read.