User:Aah153/Thyra J. Edwards/Strr34 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Aah153


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Aah153/Thyra J. Edwards
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Thyra J. Edwards
 * Thyra J. Edwards

Evaluate the drafted changes
I'm not sure if I can't see the sources or theres no citations, my guess would be I just can't see them.

The editing of the early life section was a needed boost for the article as the original was poor. The new one is really well done as it's short and offers insight into Edwards without going outside the scope of early life.

I don't know if you were just leaving the writing and personal life section untouched but I think adding a new section on radicalization was much needed. It doesn't really fall under the scope of anything else. If you could find sources more specific about her brand of politics; socialist/communist/trotskyist, whatever views she held I think that would tie in well. Also just add links to to other wiki articles.

You could probably add more to radicalizaiton i.e. there's a gap where was she in the late 30s and early 40s? Was she still in the USSR? Did she have any negative experiences there? What was her ultimate takeaways?

I don't think you need to add a section on legacy but maybe a sentence or two on her legacy would be nice to see, how prominent is her writing today, does she have followers, how much influence did she wield then and now?

Otherwise this is well written and adds layers to the wiki page.