User:Aalva450/Coral Reef Bleaching/Julianaquintero0917 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Aalva450
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: Coral bleaching

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? No not yet
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? There are some introductory sentences however, I believe the first sentence should clearly state the purpose of the article.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? No, only mentions one cause should include all the causes of coral bleaching.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? Yes, talks about interesting studies and mentions how the pandemic (COVID-19) is affecting this situation.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? It is a little bit detailed. By reducing the amount of content, it will make it easier for the reader to understand man idea.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes, includes recent studies.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? Content on other causes of coral bleaching should be added, heat stress isn't the only cause.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? No, it is directly talking to the reader. Uses "you" instead of third person point of view.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? Tries to convince the reader that humans are the root of problems in coral bleaching. For example, mentioned "we need to change our ways to preserve coral reefs".
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? Heat stress in coral bleaching is overrepresented. Should include other theories for the causes.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? Yes, tries to convince the reader that they should change what they are doing to protect coral reefs.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes, includes important and reliable studies.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? They are pretty thorough however, more impactful statistics would be better.
 * Are the sources current? Yes all sources are from 2020.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes, they all work.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? It is clear and easy to read. It could be made more concise to allow it to flow better.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? Very few run on sentences.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes, the paragraphs allow for easy reading.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Has not added content to article yet.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The studies included are the strengths because they support the information.
 * How can the content added be improved? By making it in third person point of view and making it more concise. Additionally, it should make it clear that heat stress isn't the only cause of coral bleaching. Should explain some of the causes with research to back up statements.