User:Aamna11/Social determinants of health/TheAlexRodriguez Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) Aamna11
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Aamna11/sandbox

Lead

 * The lead is a perfect transition to what you begin talking about. I love the way it flowed and the way you brought in various examples of what actually social determinants are, especially, because I had no idea what they were -- even with the definition in the first sentence. Although your article is still a work in progress, I would recommend adding a sentence about your 2nd sentence regarding an outline of what you plan to talk about (almost like an implicit thesis). I do not know where you are going with your information, especially because you start talking about programs, such as Obama Care.

Content evaluation
I really appreciate that I have seen thus far. I was reading the article as a whole, and although the article seems pretty established, you add some viable information, especially in your 2nd sentence giving examples of what social determinants are. I would suggest finding a focus or limiting your information, because to my understanding, I think you're just adding to the first section of the paper right? I think you are going into specifics the more you go on with the paragraph. Something to keep in mind!

Tone and balance evaluation
In my opinion, you seem very neutral, yet affirmative. You provide valuable information and new insight. I like the implementation of the programs, it builds on your assertions!

Sources and references evaluation
As of now, there are no references. Please add some because I think wiki deems that as plaragarism (even though you have not published your article yet lol)

Overall impressions
Overall comments:


 * In all, although I assume you will add more, I like it! It is easy to read and definitely enriches the existing article. I would just recommend to cite your sources and considering how much (and where) you will put your information. Be careful in not going on tangent, especially when usually the 1st section is fast, concise, and to the point.