User:Abbimarie567/Early childhood education in the United States/Templero316 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Abbimarie567


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Abbimarie567/Early childhood education in the United States


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Early childhood education in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
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I like that you've tried to shorten the article, the original felt really long, and more like I was staring at a giant wall of text than actually reading something. I do think the article could use some more sections to break it up though, as it still kind of has that "wall of text" feeling. You could also try adding images, although I can't say I'd know what to add in terms of those either, so I can't say I blame you for not having any. You also misspelled "revolution" in your first sentence.