User:Abbyfah/Cultural eutrophication/Tandoori Jones Peer Review

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 * I am reviewing the work done by user Abbyfah
 * User:Abbyfah/Cultural eutrophication

Lead evaluation
It does appear as though the lead has been updated to reflect the new content added by the user. The original article, mentions that eutrophication has occurred due to "human activity" it never specifically states that it can be caused by the dumping of raw sewage. Though, there is a section which states "Extra nutrients are also supplied by treatment plants" This has been amended by the user at least in a following paragraph in the Lead to state "waste treatment plants" which does provide some clarity. The introductory sentence of the lead clearly and concisely describes the articles topic. The lead does breifly mention the articles following sections; "nutrients are added through human activity, including but not limited to: waste treatment plants, golf courses, fertilizing lawns, burning of fossil fuels and agricultural practices.". There is some information that is provided in the Lead that is not present in the rest of the article (the exact mechanisms that cause Cultural eutrophication, in the second? paragraph of the lead "Cultural Eutrophication is when a flux of excess nutrients from human activity are added into a local run-off which in turns speeds up the natural eutrophication") this can easily be remediated by including that entire paragraph in its own section with no other changes. with the exception of the inclusion of the exact mechanism of Cultural eutrophication, the lead is very concise.

Content evaluation
The content that was added to the article is extremely relevant to the topic, with the sources of the information appearing to be current. It appears as though the only content that does not belong is the word immediately following the sentence; "In some areas incineration is used where the solid waste is exposed to high temperatures turning it into ash." Otherwise the content is relevant.

Tone and balance evaluation
The content is neutral, considering this phenomenon is one that may not provide any positives. it would be interesting to see if there any potential benefits to Cultural eutrophication but that maybe outside the scope of the article/assignment. The article does not make any attempt to persuade the reader to favor any position.

Sources and references evaluation
All the new content provided by the user is corroborated by reliable references from a variety of sources. The sources are extremely current with several from the last five years. The provided links for the references are in working order, and are fairly comprehensive.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
The content is well written, and is concise. There are a few sections within the article that become fairly technical but it is written in such a way that the reader can manage. some stylistic changes can be suggested in order to enhance readability however, with an example below.

Original:"'Raw sewage is a large contributor to Cultural Eutrophication since sewage matter is very rich in nutrients. Releasing raw sewage into a large water body is referred to as sewage dumping, which is a large problem in today's society even in developed countries. The disposal of raw sewage into ocean waters is banned in many countries including the United States, but many developed countries such as Canada continue to pump untreated sewage waste into ocean waters (water encyclopedia, 2020). There are multiple different ways to fix Cultural Eutrophication with raw sewage being a point source. Waste collection, incineration, and waste treatment have become common practices in industrialized parts of the world (Seo et al., 2004). A wastewater treatment plant is where the water will be filtered to regular water before discharging into a large water body. In some areas incineration is used where the solid waste is exposed to high temperatures turning it into ash.penis Convectional sludge incineration systems mostly charge dewatered sludge directly into the incinerator (Okufuji, n.d.). Generating an anaerobic environment is also another method where microorganisms degrade the waste without the use of oxygen. An anaerobic system can be used for pretreatment prior to discharging to a municipal wastewater treatment plant (EVOQUA, 2019). The incineration method and the anaerobic methods are the most environmentally friendly compared to others (Seo et al., 2004). Anaerobic treatment use substantially less energy, require less chemicals, and incur lower sludge handling costs compared to aerobic treatments; as well the biogas produced is a source of renewable energy to generate electricity (EVOQUA, 2019). Similarly, incinerating a ton of waste produces electric energy equivalent to 52.1 kWh/ton of combustible waste in the combines heat and power generation; this amount displaces electricity that would be provided by an electric utility power plant that uses fossil fuels in Korea (Seo et al., 2004).'"Edited: Raw sewage is a main driver of Cultural Eutrophication as sewage matter is very rich in nutrients. Releasing raw sewage into a large water body is referred to as sewage dumping, which is a significant problem in today's society even in developed countries. sewage dumping into ocean waters is banned in many countries including the United States, but many developed countries such as Canada continue to do so. Raw sewage induced Cultural Eutrophication can be mitigated in many ways. with waste collection, incineration, and waste treatment have become common practices in industrialized parts of the world.

Wastewater treatment plants filter contaminated water before it is discharged into a [large] water body. (maybe expand on this?)

Incineration is another method of reducing the introduction of sewage waste into water bodies. Convectional sludge incineration systems mostly charge dewatered sludge directly into an incinerator (Okufuji, n.d.).

Generating an anaerobic environment is also another method where microorganisms degrade the waste without the use of oxygen. An anaerobic system can be used for pretreatment prior to discharging to a municipal wastewater treatment plant (EVOQUA, 2019).

Incineration and anaerobic degradation are the most environmentally friendly methods of waste treatment strategies (Seo et al., 2004). Anaerobic treatment use substantially less energy, requiring less chemicals, and incur lower sludge handling costs compared to aerobic treatments. In addition, the biogas produced can be used as a source of renewable energy to generate electricity (EVOQUA, 2019). Similarly, incinerating a ton of waste produces electric energy equivalent to 52.1 kWh/ton of combustible waste in the combines heat and power generation (I'm not sure what this statement means); this amount displaces electricity that would be provided by an electric utility power plant that uses fossil fuels in Korea (Seo et al., 2004).

Images and media evaluation
There doesn't appear to be any new images or media provided by the user.