User:Abbyybakerr/sandbox

Peer-Review by Amanda O'Brien

 * 1) Content- Both paragraphes are very similar in size so you might want to add some more information to the paraphrase. I think you did a very good job with everything.
 * 2) Organization- You seem very organized, and very confident in what you have to say. The way you gave detail was very nice and very easy to understand.
 * 3) Tone-The tone in the article you paraphrased seemed as if I was reading an acual wikipedia article!
 * 4) Sources- This source seems very reliable!

Recognized as a legitimate adult diagnostic category, attention deficit hyperactivity disorder has received little investigation on the real challenges and impairments that come along with it. One hundred and seventy-two adults with ADHD were compared with thirty adults who were not diagnosed with ADHD, in a recent study, which brought along some intriguing findings. The group who had been previously diagnosed showed greater rates of challenging behavior, conduct issues, substance abuse disorders, and use of illegal substances. In addition, they also demonstrated psychological maladjustment, increased change in profession, and dangerous driving. A much larger amount of subjects with ADHD receive a suspended license, unsatisfactory reports from work, and weak educational reports. Moreover, these adults had a higher number of failed marriages. However, conflicting with older studies, these adults with ADHD did not show any mood disorders or anxiety. This concludes that adults with ADHD display higher risks of disruptive behavior and lack of performance in school, work, and driving.

PEER REVIEW LoganW501 (talk) 20:11, 22 February 2019 (UTC)

Content- The section added is comprehensive. The addition was written in a way that the original details are portrayed in your own words while still providing the information needed to conclude the ending results of the study. I also think that this section will be relevant for the Wikipedia article. The added section won't duplicate other sections of the article because it adds a study that has not been discussed. I would recommend putting the section in one of the beginning paragraphs where it discusses the definitions/side effects of ADHD.

Organization- Are the additions in an organized and logical fashion? If not, what modification do you recommend? The addition is organized and has a nice flow. You might need to add an extra paragraph instead of pasting it in the article. The only grammar issue is the start of the second sentence you might want to make the 172 "one hundred and seventy-two" or just not start the sentence with a number.

Tone- The tone sounds scientific which I think is appropriate for the article.

Sources- The source is a bit older, but I still feel that it is appropriate and will be helpful for the overall flow of the wikipedia article.

Wenqi's Feedback
Your addition is important to the current Wiki article. The content is comprehensive and language is consistent with Wiki article style. Good job.

Make sure that you add citations when you move your draft to the Wiki article. Also, proofread it.