User:Abcquantumle/Water privatization in Dar es Salaam/MayaLis1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?: Abcquantumle


 * Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Abcquantumle/Water_privatization_in_Dar_es_Salaam :
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Water_privatization_in_Dar_es_Salaam :

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The first sentence is a good intro into introducing water privatization in Dar es Salaam.

Content: All the content added is relevant to the topic and makes the topic of water privatization in Dar es Salaam much more clear.

Tone and balance: The content is neutral and is simply listing facts that occur.

Sources: The sources are all scholarly, up to date, and relevant.

Grammar: Where it says "state failure,” I would recommend taking the comma out

Impressions: Overall, this is a very good edit and it adds a lot to the quality of this section.