User:Abcquantumle/Water supply and sanitation in Tanzania/MayaLis1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?: Abcquantumle


 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Abcquantumle/Water supply and sanitation in Tanzania:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Water supply and sanitation in Tanzania:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I would include a more elaborate into to the paragraph already given. The given paragraph does not really introduce what top-down explicitly means. If the section is going to further elaborate on what top-down projects are available then a definition of what exactly top-down means would be useful to the reader.

Content: The content you added is certainly relevant and up to date as the source you referenced is very recent.

Tone & Balance: The content added is quite neural and is simply explaining facts of the situation.

Sources: I would recommend adding one more source just to further back up your facts. Possibly, including an extra source when you define what top-down means.

Grammar:

-"ascertained by colonial elites, acquiring" seems to be a bit unclear. Perhaps you meant "ascertained by colonial elites, who acquired" or "ascertained by colonial elites, leading to the acquisition of."

-"RWSPs failure" should be "RWSP's failure" (assuming RWSP is a singular noun).

-"the Utilization Act of 1974, and through interventions such as the Food is Life campaign, joined the effort for health Sanitation and Water and nutritional services" - This part seems to lack proper punctuation. Consider rephrasing for clarity.

Impressions: I think the content added definitely clarifies points within the section. I think especially the example of The Man is Health campaign in 1973 assists in making the main point.