User:Abella16/User:Abella16/Climate Change, Food Security and Migration in the US/Claire Yeiji Hong Peer Review

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Abella16
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 * https://w.wiki/9$TU
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Autumn, this was a really interesting topic and you have a lot of good information!

Lead Section:


 * You have a lot of great links in your lead section that back up the claims you make. Maybe you could elaborate more on what the effects of climate change are? You mention the effects of climate change in agriculture and beyond in your second sentence and you could briefly mention what effects you refer to.
 * You could also think about referencing the points you have in your article in the lead section. For instance, adding a sentence related to the possible solutions you explore at the end of your article.

Content:


 * Overall, you have really good content that is backed up by credible sources. I think you can expand on these claims more!
 * I think you could start your "Connection Between Climate Change, Food Security, and Migration" section with the six phases of climate change so that readers can have a sense of the food insecurity situation before reading about the migration policy changes and demographic disparities points.
 * You mention climate-smart farming practices and stormproof points in the "Possible Solutions" section that you can expand on more! Maybe you could add another section under the solutions section with different farming/agricultural practices that people could implement
 * Maybe you could hyperlink terms such as the "World Bank" or "World Food Program" so that readers who are interested can learn more about the specific organizations

Tone and Balance:


 * Your content was neutral and all of your claims were backed up with citations!
 * I really liked how you added the demographic disparities point which brings in more voices to the conversation.

Sources and References:


 * Maybe you could also add a "References" section for your citations!
 * The sources you have for "The World Bank" and "Education Efforts" points are from the actual organizations themselves, which could lead to bias. Maybe you can try to find other sources that aren't linked to those organizations to support your claim.
 * If you could find other articles that talk about the "Next California" Project, that would be interesting to see as well (maybe if an expert is talking about the project)

Organization:


 * The layout of the article was easy to follow. I think each of your points was pretty connected with the other but also a very unique and significant. Maybe you could have a separate section just on climate change and its effects before diving into how it is connected to food security and migration.

Images and Media:


 * It would be interesting to see images (maybe charts that visually represent the demographic disparities or migration projection) in your article!

New Article:


 * The article is supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources and seems to have a lot of references.
 * The article does link to some other articles, but I think more links can be added :)