User:Abella16/User:Abella16/Climate Change, Food Security and Migration in the US/Sruvs Peer Review

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Abella16
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 * User:Abella16/Climate Change, Food Security and Migration in the US:

Lead

 * This is a new article
 * While the lead is very clear about the content of the article, it leans a bit argumentative from the get-go. This is a hotly contested topic, therefore making it really important that bias isn't present.
 * The topics that follow the lead are partly addressed in it, however, I'd suggest making the possible solutions part of the article more present from the very beginning.
 * No, all of the information in the lead is present in the article!
 * The lead is concise and clear - but it could use some revision to be less biased and include the whole scope of the article. Overall, a strong starting point.

Content

 * I think the content added is relevant to the topic, it just needs to function a bit more coherently. Migration is a large part of the topic, but it seems a bit underdeveloped in the article itself. I would presume that migration and food security are directly connected in some way or the other - but they function as two independent ideas.
 * The content added is up-to-date, most of the sources having been crafted in the last five years. It's also a relevant issue politically at the moment - making it a good article to begin with.
 * Again, there is a bit missing about the migration portion of the topic, but overall the information is sufficient. All of the content that is present does belong.
 * This article is representing an equity gap! Addressing minority populations via migration is opening up this discussion to minority voices who have struggled with food security. Furthermore, this also allows for lower income populations to have a Wikipedia article written on their behalf. This is tactfully and successfully filling a content gap.

Tone and Balance

 * I would argue that the content is not as neutral as it could be, leaning a bit argumentative at times. You are presenting a connection between these things, but also drawing your own conclusions. For example, "Climate change’s effects on the processing, storage, transportation and consumption of food will also diminish food security." By claiming that it "will also" you have made a refutable claim. I caution against this.
 * The claims made seem to generally lean toward there being a direction connection between climate change diminishing food security in minority populations. While I understand that this seems to be a straightforward assertion, it is technically a claim. The second source in particular seems to align with your views on this heavily.
 * I'd say that the viewpoint in conjunction with these things being connected is overrepresented in this article. I'd offer more sources that argue the counterargument of this. i.e. people that don't believe in climate change, or believe that it is dangerous.
 * The content, by nature of developing a slightly argumentative nature, does begin to feel that it's persuading me to view climate change and food security in this manner. I think with some slight evidentiary and linguistic tweaks, you'll be perfect!

Sources and References

 * Yes, there are 15 sources, most references more than once, giving proper reference to the originator of the information. They are also reliable, stemming from academic sources or world organization that study the specifics of food security.
 * Yes, the content accurately reflects what the sources are saying. I think you have done an excellent job researching this. My only caution would be to acknowledge that some of these articles are slightly biased, therefore, the information needs even more checking. OR only pull from these articles what you can verify elsewhere.
 * The sources are thorough, but they are plenty, so you are covering this topic well. Again, try to write more on migration and migrant voices. Having an article reflect exactly what the minority population feels about this would be very beneficial.
 * The sources are current, most within the last five years.
 * The sources have some ethnic individuals and some women, but overall, they would benefit from more diversity. Again, when speaking of migrant populations, try to find sources that they spoke to/on directly.
 * The sources that you've selected are good, but i do advise you to procure some more academic sources from the databases that we have access to. Sources that are not solely world organizations.
 * The links work!

Organization

 * The content is well-written and easy to understand. As mentioned above, just caution against bias.
 * There are some slight grammatical and spelling issues that appear throughout the article. I'd suggest running the paragraphs through something like Grammarly to catch all the things that the eyes cannot.
 * The content is well organized, but it could potentially benefit from restructuring

Images and Media

 * The image provided did increase understanding but could use more overall.
 * There is only one image, but it is well captioned!
 * They do adhere to copyright.
 * They are visually appealing

New Article

 * This is meeting the notability requirements
 * More minority based sources would be beneficial in increasing the reach of the article.
 * It does follow the pattern of other articles making it a more easy read.
 * It links to plenty of other articles