User:Abhisheksoni2/Gertrude Crotty Davenport/JaimeA10 Peer Review

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Abhisheksoni2


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 * User:Abhisheksoni2/Gertrude Crotty Davenport


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gertrude Crotty Davenport

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead paragraph wasn't changed in this draft, but I think it is good as it is because it is concise while including the important information about Davenport. I like how you expanded on her scientific work and specifically the views that Davenport held because that gives more context the motives of her work. Including her own articles was also helpful for showing her individuality because the original article makes it sound more like she was just an assistance to her husband. You also do a good job of explaining her views in an objective tone.

I think you added some very valuable references as well (5 new ones), but I noticed on your draft references 16, 17, and 18 don't have links to the source. If you could include the links for those sources, that would help. Overall, it was a very good expansion on the article. My only recommendation is adding the source links for 16,17, and 18.