User:AbiL7/Education reform/Denizmasjedi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(AbiL7)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AbiL7/Education_reform?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Education reform

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article looks well-written and organized. I did not see much "history" of racial segregation but rather mostly the consequences it has had on the population. the first paragraph includes a few claims that the second paragraph supports with statistics. Maybe if the statistics were somewhat embedded in the first paragraph or new statistics could be introduced to support the claims the tone of the article would be more neutral! In the last sentence of the second paragraph, the word "reaching" should be replaced with "reach" to fit the verb tense of the sentence.

"Due to a history of racial, and subsequently class, segregation in the U.S. resulting from practices of law, a racial wealth divide has manifested": This sentence could be reworded a bit because starting with "Due to" somewhat sounds like an academic paper. Overall, the content is relevant and sources are recent!