User:AbiL7/Educational interventions for first-generation students/Denizmasjedi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(AbiL7)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AbiL7/Educational_interventions_for_first-generation_students?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Educational interventions for first-generation students

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article is well-written and has a neutral tone! Some changes that could be made are as follows. The third sentence of the second paragraph could be broken down into 2 sentences for more clarity. There could be more content added to the first paragraph regarding college access programs in general as the second paragraph exclusively discusses the Minds Matter program. Furthermore, another area that could be improved is adding more scholarly sources to the content! The content added definitely strengthen the original wikipedia article.