User:Abigaelclark/Communication/Heba.Aweiwi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Abigaelclark


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Abigaelclark/Communication


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Communication

Evaluate the drafted changes
There are many great things to talk about for this Wikipedia entry on the topic of communication.

After reviewing the original Wikipedia article, I see no information on the theorist Harold Laswell and his communication model. I think it was a great choice to add this detail that has not been described within the article on the communication model, especially since it is equally important to cover theorists and models to help conceptualize how humans convey meaning and messages. The tone of this entry is neutral, adequately presented and does not contain any bias or persuasion on the theory. The organization of the entry is also great! Once again, it is concise, clear and easy to understand.

The content of this additional information was very relevant and addressed the topic very concisely. I think what would better this entry is adding some extra information on the development of this theory and some additional information on Harold Lasswell. Since he is a critical figure in communication, he teaches the various factors of communication such as its components, how it can be broken down, criticisms, and developments, and I think that would be important to include. Additionally, adding a brief overview of Laswell and how he came to form this model and theory would better help set a foundation to understand the theory and the history behind the founder.

I see that there is an intext-citation within this entry which is very good; however, there is no link to the article in the references section at the bottom of the article. Within the Wikipedia training module, a section provides an overview of how to properly cite sources using the “Visual Editor Toolbar” when editing your articles before submitting them to your sandbox. I suggest going through this training just as a refresher to help with entries you will be making in the future!

Overall, it is a great entry that all readers can easily understand, especially those outside the communication field!