User:Acaebow1/Dogs in religion/Its hard to make a username on this Peer Review

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(Acaebow1)
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Acaebow1/Dogs in religion
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dogs in religion
 * Dogs in religion

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Lead
 * Excerpted, "Across these religious contexts, the objectives regarding dogs in religion range from emblematic representations of virtues like loyalty and protection to teachings on purity and ritual practices"
 * The last part of this sentence could be improved to better sum up the different views surrounding the keeping of dogs.
 * "...teachings on purity and ritual practices" sounds vague.
 * The Lead has been improved upon significantly to better introduce the nature of the topic as well as summarize some of the main points made in the article.
 * Tone and Balance
 * For the section regarding Islam's view on dogs, you do not mention why dogs are considered ritually impure.
 * You could also post examples of statements made by scholars regarding the ruling for dogs as being najis.
 * Sources and References
 * In the section titled Judaism,
 * "According to a credible source, Jewish law prohibits neglect or abuse of any living animal, including dogs, and underscores the importance of proper care and responsibility for animals within the Jewish community"
 * Rather than saying, "according to a credible source," just mention the author and their background. This will further help build notability.
 * Most of your information is referenced by one source that talks about dogs for that specific faith. This is something we are advised against. Try to dig deeper on Google Scholar to find more sources.
 * For example, the paragraph you add for Islam only has 2 references, and they are from the same source.
 * The same can be said for the "Mesopotamia, Chinese Tradition and Judaism" sections.
 * Praise.
 * You did an excellent job upon improving the existing article with your contributions. You have improved greatly in the Lead section which is one of the most important sections of a Wikipedia article. Great job!