User:Acechen0/Addictive behavior/Garciba0 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Acechen0


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Acechen0/Addictive_behavior?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Addictive behavior
 * Addictive behavior

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I really like you edits. I think the sections you added are very much needed for this article and very informative.

I would suggest adding wikipedia links to certain psychological terms because there were lots of big terms that would be useful for me to refer to so I can better understand your statements.

Lead section: You have a good introduction statement. Your lead includes a brief description of the articles major section that you added, except for the section on therapies, so I would add a sentence and description of that. Overall, it is concise and not overly detailed which is good.

Content: The content you added was very relevant to the topic. Looks like all the content is up-to-date. I think your section on relating to adolescence fills a gap in wikipedia and is an underrepresented population. good!

Tone & Balance: Content is all neutral and not bias.

Sources & References: The sources you used look credible, however there are not that many sources to back up your statements so I would add more sources associated with your sentences.

Organization: Content is well-written, however I do think that your sentences can be more succinct. There are a few grammatical errors. Content is well-organized into sections that reflect the major points of the topic.

Images & Media: There are no images and I think you could definitely add some to understand the models you mention.