User:Acechen0/Addictive behavior/MatthewSchaublin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) acechen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Acechen0/Addictive_behavior?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Acechen0/Addictive_behavior?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
You may want to indicate that “there is research showing” as opposed to referring to the fact that the information is coming from a singular article with regards to the personality traits. This might give it a more encyclopedic tone and people can see that it is from a specific study in the citation.

Good tone and overall information seems useful.

“addictions might give an individual a sense of power, confidence, endorsement, or other feelings that they might not attain in their real life. “ I think it is important to acknowledge that these addictions are a part of people's real lives, but they may be less prone to experience these in other aspects of their lives.