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Article Evaluation for Drama:


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?

I think that the article is laid out in a very effective way. All the information presented seems to be very valuable in order to fully understand the book. However, I feel like there are minor details included in the plot summary that are distracting and cause the summary to be almost too long. For instance, I think the part about Callie and Liz going to the basement and having an awkward exchange with Greg as well as the part about Callie professing her love of theater due to Les Miserables are not exactly necessary.


 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?

It seems as if all the information is up to date and significant. However, maybe some more critics could be included if any have newly created critiques of the book.


 * What else could be improved?

The section called "Themes" is very effective, however it only uses one critic, Eti Berland, to analyze the book. I think it would be very much more effective if the article included multiple critics so that the analysis is dynamic and multi-sided, not solely dependent on one critic. Also, there are a few grammar mistakes, such as misplaced commas, or the first sentence lacking a word like "that" or "which" after the phrase, "an American cartoonist,".


 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

As I touched upon before, I do think that the article is neutral, and lacking bias. However, I feel like the inclusion of only one critic forms a potential bias.


 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

I think some of the viewpoints that challenge the novel are underrepresented. For instance, there are only a few examples of institutions that have challenged or banned the book, so I feel like the article could elaborate more on other controversies surrounding the book, and maybe more reasons for why it's banned.


 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?

It does seem that all the ideas are cited and the links do properly function. Also, the article does not have opinions of its own, as it uses ideas of critics (which are cited).

Article Evaluation for "Taíno":


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * I think that the article does include very relevant information about the Taíno people. I have read over the article and found it to be very informative and organized in a way to bolster comprehension. However, I think that the order of some sections could be altered, for instance I think that the section "Women" could be moved above the "Spaniards and Taíno" section as the section on women pertains more to the culture that is described in the beginning of the article.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * I think that I could elaborate a little more on the Taíno interaction with the Spaniards. I am planning to add information about the interaction with Columbus, and the way in which each group perceived each other.
 * What else could be improved?
 * Overall, I am going to improve the way in which information on Columbus and the Taínos is described, so as to avoid biases and the dominant narratives. I think it is important to really elaborate in this section so that readers can take away valuable information, as opposed to simply reaffirming their preexisting beliefs and notions.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * The article does seem to be neutral, as it focuses on the facts of the Taíno culture. However, I may add a couple sentences from Rethinking Columbus or the Cabrera et al, or Acosta articles that show the Taíno perspective and the counter-narratives of their history.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * As I said before, I think critics in general are underrepresented in this article, as I feel like the section on the Spaniards would be more effective if I added some of these perspectives.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * The citations do seem to work. However, as I add information, I plan on adding citations when necessary (especially when I add information using Rethinking Columbus or any of the articles).

Article Evaluation for "Chief Wahoo":


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * It seems that everything in the article is relevant to the topic, however it seems as if there is an excessive amount of unnecessary information. I think there are some whole sections that don't need to be included, for instance the sub-section "Battle Flag over USS Cleveland" doesn't seem to be information that merits an entire section in my opinion. Also, I am uncertain about the necessity for the section titled "Controversy" since this section is completely covered in an entirely different article ("Cleveland Indians name and logo controversy").
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * I do feel as if the majority of the article presents very current and up-to-date information about the logo. The edit history of the article suggests that many users actively update and edit the article. However, there are some sections that don't present new information, for instance the section "Use during spring training" only provides information up through 2010, which is not too recent.
 * What else could be improved?
 * I think there are a lot of opportunities for me to condense text, because I feel as if many of the sections contain long, repetitive, sentences. Also, it seems that many of the sections have an overlap with other sections, which creates a large amount of repetition.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * It does seem that the article is very neutral, as the majority of it is centered on providing facts and history about the logo itself. The article does include a good amount of analysis and critiques of the logo controversy, which all seem to come from a variety of sources. Each section has a couple of quotes from different sources regarding different viewpoints on the logo. So in this sense, the article seems to be entirely neutral, and unbiased.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * As I said before, the article contains viewpoints from many different sources, both that are for and against the inclusion of the Chief Wahoo logo. There are some opinionated sentences in the article, but they are often quoted, or credited to a source (such as a newspaper writer, or an interviewed Native American). Therefore, I feel as if there is a good balance of fact and unbiased analysis in the article.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * There is a very sufficient amount of citations, as it seems as if all the factual sentences, and quotations are linked to a source. I plan to do a more in-depth analysis of the sources, as well as adding additional sources when necessary. Furthermore, many of the citations are repeated, so I tried to add a couple more articles to improve the variety of sources.

Article Evaluation for "A Wrinkle in Time":


 * I think that the lead section of the article is a good length for readers who are trying to get a brief overview of the article. However, I feel as if more information (like a sentence or two) could be added talking about the contents of the novel. As of now, all we know is that the novel is "a science fantasy novel." I think readers would benefit more from some additional information.
 * The background section is very sufficient because it talks a lot about Madeleine L'Engle's background and her experience before writing the novel. The background section does not have any criticism or interpretation, as it merely presents the facts of L'Engle's experience and inspiration for writing the novel.
 * I think that the summary presents all the vital information in the novel, however, it still feels as if the summary is a long read, especially for those just trying to get a brief overview of the novel. For instance, in some instances, the summary presents certain scenes or events in multiple sentences, where I think it could be condensed into a few phrases or so. Also, I do not think that the use of quotations is effective at all. There are some cases where the quotations confuse the reader, as they will be unsure if they are directly quoted from the novel, or air-quoted by the writer. Overall, I think the plot is a little informal, and much too long for a Wikipedia page.
 * There is no distinct "genre" section, but I recall that the genre was discussed both in the lead section, as well as the background section, which I think is sufficient for the article.
 * The reception section is a little short in my opinion, as I think that the article could definitely elaborate on some of the critiques and examples that it uses. For instance, they include two, one sentence examples that definitely could include a little more information.
 * The article includes an extensive description of all the characters mentioned in the book which is a little puzzling to me. First off, the article includes literally every single character mentioned in the novel, even those as minor as Mrs. Buncombe, who has almost no relevance to the plot. Therefore, I feel as if much of this section is unnecessary, as it is either repeated information, or information that is extremely irrelevant to a Wikipedia reader.
 * I think that the source "L'Engle, Madeleine" from the Encyclopedia of Religious and Spiritual Development could definitely be used in this article to learn more about L'Engle and her experiences before and after writing the novel. I think that this source would play into the background section of the article, as well as maybe even the analysis section, as the source elaborates on science fiction and its interconnection with spiritualism.
 * Thomas. (2006). L'engle, Madeleine. In E. M. Dowling, & W. G. Scarlett (Eds.), Encyclopedia of religious and spiritual development. Thousand Oaks, CA: Sage Publications. Retrieved from https://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.credoreference.com/content/entry/sagersd/l_engle_madeleine/0?institutionId=702

Article Evaluation for "Persepolis (comics)":


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * All the information does seem relevant, however the summary and character sections are extremely lengthy. Also, since the novel is a graphic novel, I feel as if panels/images play a significant role, yet none of them are included. I feel like that would be a very good way of helping the reader understand concepts/scenes without having to read through the extremely long summary word-for-word. Also, it seems like many other Wikipedia articles use a lot of images, so it is sort of ironic that this article, on a graphic novel, has absolutely none.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * I think some information in the "Publication history" section could definitely be updated to help clarify the article. For instance, the article introduces Satrapi's publisher only as "David B." This is definitely not sufficient as a way of introducing the publisher, who plays a very prominent role in the novel. The information on David B. is not accurate, as I looked through the source and found out that he, in fact, is not the publisher, but rather the founder of the publication company. I plan to modify and edit this section so that the correct information is presented.
 * What else could be improved?
 * I think there are some instances where the article uses quotations, yet they don't attribute the quotes to a critic or author, even though the work is cited. For instance, in the "Background" section, the article uses two quotes with the citation [2], however, the quotes seem to come out of nowhere. I definitely think that there should be an introduction to wherever the quote is coming from, so that the section seems more reliable. Also, in the "Publication history" section, there are more examples of these unexplained quotations which do not seem fully effective.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * The article does a good job of staying neutral and avoiding biases in either direction. Much of the article is pure summary, which, although it is very long, does not offer any biases or misrepresentations. Also, the "Reception" section does a good job of elaborating on both the positive and negative reviews and receptions to the novel, rather than solely focusing on the positive reviews. The paragraph on censorship highlights this unbiased approach, as much of it is dedicated to how the novel was critiqued.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * As I mentioned above, some of the quotations used are not linked to authors or critics, and even if they are, there is no background information or introductions explaining who they are. However, there does seem to be a variety of sources, which does strengthen the article's reliability.

Draft of New Content to add to A Wrinkle in Time Article:


 * I will add this section of new content in the Lead section, right after the "Hans Christian Andersen Award" and right before the "It is the first book..." ...bold is my new additions

A Wrinkle in Time is a science fantasy novel written by American Madeleine L'Engle, first published in 1962. The book won the Newbery Medal, Sequoyah Book Award, and Lewis Carroll Shelf Award, and was runner-up for the Hans Christian Andersen Award. '''Throughout the novel, the young characters Meg Murry, Charles Wallace Murry, and Calvin O'Keefe, embark on a journey through space and time, from universe to universe, as they endeavor to save their father, Mr. Murry, and the world, at the same time. The novel offers a glimpse into the battles between light and darkness, goodness and evil, as the young characters mature into adolescents on their journey. The novel wrestles with questions of spirituality and purpose, as the characters are often thrown into conflicts of love, divinity, and goodness, [citation to Thomas article from my bibliography].''' It is the first book in L'Engle's Time Quintet, which follows the Murrys and Calvin O'Keefe.


 * I will add this section of new content in the Lead section, in its own paragraph, right after the "which follow the Murrys and Calvin O'Keefe." and right before the "The book inspired two film adaptations..."

'''Madeleine L'Engle mirrored the Murry family after her own. Scholar Bernice E. Cullinan noted that L'Engle created characters who "share common joy with a mixed fantasy and science fiction setting." [citation to the Bernice Cullinan article from my bibliography]. The novel's scientific and religious undertones are therefore highly reflective upon the life of L'Engle. [citation to the Sarah Pulliam Bailey article from my bibliography]''' The book inspired two film adaptations, both by Disney: a 2003 television film directed by John Kent Harrison, and a 2018 theatrical film directed by Ava DuVernay.

Religious Analysis Section:


 * This is the majority of the new information I plan on adding. I plan on making it a subsection within the section Major Themes.


 * I plan to add this small paragraph at the beginning of the section, right before the "Madeleine L'Engle's fantasy works are in part..."

'''The novel is highly spiritualized, with notable influences of divine intervention and prominent undertones of religious messages. According to scholar James Beasley Simpson, the overwhelming love and desire for light within the novel is directly representative of a Christian love for God and Jesus Christ [citation to the James Beasley Simpson article]. Furthermore, throughout the children's journey, they encounter spiritual intervention, signaling God's presence in the ordinary, as well as the extendibility of God's power and love [citation to the Thomas article].''' Madeleine L'Engle's fantasy works are in part highly expressive of her Christian viewpoint in a manner somewhat similar to that of Christian fantasy writer C. S. Lewis. She was herself the official writer-in-residence at New York City's Episcopal Cathedral of St. John the Divine, which is known for its prominent position in the liberal wing of the Episcopal Church. L'Engle's liberal Christianity has been the target of criticism from more conservative Christians, especially with respect to certain elements of A Wrinkle in Time.


 * In between the two paragraphs that are currently about religious analysis of the novel, I plan to add the information on religious analysis that is currently present in the Locations section. This includes all the references to mythological figures and locations that have religious significance within the novel. The research that I found on these references are sources already included in the Locations section, so I simply plan on moving that information, rather than adding my own.


 * After the paragraph ending in "ancient star-beings who act as guardian angels..." I plan to add this following new paragraph to conclude the section on religious analysis:

The theme of picturing the fight of good against evil as a battle of light and darkness is a recurring one. Its manner is reminiscent of the prologue to the Gospel of John, which is quoted within the book. When the "Mrs Ws" reveal their secret roles in the cosmic fight against "the darkness" they ask the children to name some figures on Earth (a partially dark planet) who fight the darkness. They name Jesus, and later in the discussion Buddha is named as well, along with various creative artists and philanthropists. The three women are described as ancient star-beings who act as guardian angels.

'''Nevertheless, religious journalist Sarah Pulliam Bailey doubts whether the novel contains religious undertones. Bailey explains that many readers believe the novel promotes witchcraft, as opposed to alluding to Christian spirituality. Bailey states that conservative Christians take offense, due to the novel's potential relativistic qualities, suggesting the various interpretations of religious allusions signals anti-Christian sentiments [citation to Sarah Pulliam Bailey article]. In her personal journal referencing A Wrinkle in Time, L'Engle confirms the religious content within the novel: "If I've ever written a book that says what I feel about God and the universe, this is it," [citation to Sarah Pulliam Bailey article (where the L'Engle quote came from)].'''

Bibliography for additions:

Ang, Susan. "Wrinkle in Time, A (1962)." The Cambridge Guide to Children's Books in English. Ed. Victor Watson. Cambridge, UK: Cambridge University Press, 2001. Web.

Bailey, Sarah P. "Publishers Rejected Her, Christians Attacked Her: The Deep Faith of 'A Wrinkle in Time' Author Madeleine L'Engle." The Washington Post, 2018, Biography In Context; Gale. Web. http://link.galegroup.com/apps/doc/A530261696/BIC?u=wash43584&sid=BIC&xid=a8c7637d

Cullinan, Bernice E. "L'Engle, Madeleine." Continuum Encyclopedia of Children's Literature. Eds. Bernice E. Cullinan and Diane Goetz Person. London, UK: Continuum, 2005. Web.

Doty, Gene. "Review of A Wrinkle in Time." Christianity and Literature 43.1 (1993): 109-11. Web.

Simpson, James Beasley. "Humankind - Religion - Spirituality." Simpson's Contemporary Quotations. Boston, MA, USA: Houghton Mifflin, 1988. Web.

Stott, Jon C. "The Lion and the Unicorn." (1977) Web.

Thomas. "L'Engle, Madeleine." Encyclopedia of Religious and Spiritual Development. Eds. Elizabeth M. Dowling and W. George Scarlett. Thousand Oaks, CA, USA: Sage Publications, 2006. Web.