User:Acorn With a Notebook/Slow fashion/Marcplummer82 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Acorn With a Notebook)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Slow fashion


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Slow fashion

Evaluate the drafted changes
First starting with the Slow fashion article, I do not think that lead has been updated to reflect the content added by my peer. Although, I think that the leads introductory sentence does is very simplified and straight to the point but I do not feel it fully describes the topic. The lead does not really have a description of the major sections in the article. Thus, it does include information that is present in the article. Overall, I think that lead is very short and could use more detail providing more information about the major sections. I think the content added is related to the topic and is up to date. The content is missing is regarding the impact of the slow fashion could add more detail to it also does not have Wikipedia equity gaps. Yes, the article is neutral and their are not any claims I found to be biased. Although, I do find that persuade the reader that you should prefer slow fashion over fast fashion. Yes, all the content are backed up by secondary sources and the content does reflect what the cited sources say. All the sources are current and majority of the sources are reliable, many are organizations based websites. Also I tested a few of the links, they work. As far as the content I think it is concise and easy to read just appears to be lacking detail and is very short. There are no images in this article, and I would help to be added to help create a visual for the information being provided. For my overall impressions, I think the strengths is that it is very easy to read and is well organized. I think the content that can be added to pictures to go with the information. Also content could be added to the impact of slow fashion since the latest information was in 2018. Futhermore, being that their are 35 sources listed, and such a short article I think their could more detail to be added from these sources to make the article longer.