User:AdaezeNoble313/Prostitution in Nigeria/Aprilmayma Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AdaezeNoble313, Angelina4118


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AdaezeNoble313/Prostitution_in_Nigeria?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Prostitution in Nigeria

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Additions to the article, such as the intent of women's advocacy in Nigeria and the concerns related to venereal disease, are valuable content and relevant to the article. The influence of British entrance to Nigeria and the introduction of the cash economy seems very important, but I think could be developed and made it's own section. I am not quite sure that "bringings" is correct diction, so it may be worth revising. I think that the changes to the draft including the influence of cash on prostitution are good, but can be compartmentalized for organization purposes; an example could be separating economic, legal, and social origins of prostitution in Nigeria (to distinguish the influences of the cash economy, prostitution laws, and social attitude toward sex and it commodification). I think the linkage between legal restrictions on prostitution to the rising stigma against VD and child prostitution is a great addition to the article that should be developed upon, and possibly in its own section because it can be considered a legal landmark/important turning point in the history of prostitution for Nigeria. I'm concerned about tone neutrality in the addition of the last paragraph ("Steeped in moralist sentiments"), which needs to have more robust sources and an explanation in order to stand as it, as well as the clarity of pronouns, and it may be worth reviewing what pronouns are referring to what. I also think the mention of the petition in the last paragraph would be strengthened if could be cited with the petition itself.

General improvements may include breaking up the article into sub-sections for organization, ease of reading, and narrative consistency (such as, making VD it's own sub-section). Additionally, new additions to the article could be strengthened with a wider array of sources.