User:Adahl5/Amphitheatre of Pompeii/Gopokesyessirrr Peer Review

General info
Adahl5
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Adahl5/Amphitheatre_of_Pompeii?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Amphitheatre_of_Pompeii&diff=1188973619&oldid=1186183059

Evaluate the drafted changes
On a positive note, neutrality is continuous throughout and 3/6 added facts are related to architecture. However, there are a few instances of misspelled words and poor grammar, also some sentence structure doesn't seem to fit Wikipedia standards, along with 3/6 of the facts seeming irrelevant to the architecture of the Amphitheatre of Pompeii. In general for a Wikipedia site they can be interesting and possibly relevant, though. Overall, the main review I give is a suggestion to correct grammar mistakes and to restructure some sentences.

Some possible examples of needed improvements include:

1. "Being on of the earliest Amphitheaters made, there was no underground areas for the gladiators. Instead, the quadriporticus was built above ground and close to the arena. When events were done, the dead were taken through a large door named the Porta Libitinensis to leave the arena to be disposed of."

Firstly, there is a misspelling of "one" in the first sentence. Also, the structure of the sentences is not straightforward or clear enough for Wikipedia standards. I'd recommend stating that the quadriporticus was built above ground near the arena then contrast it to later amphitheaters that had their quadriporticus underground, instead of displaying the facts in the given order and separating them as separate sentences. In the last sentence, to comply with Wikipedia standards displayed throughout the course, I would recommend another reversal of the sentence structure by simply moving "when events were done" to the end of the sentence to display the statement in a more factual format.

2. "A recovered fresco depicts the end of a fight, with the losing gladiator waiting for their fate will be."

This fact has a grammatical error near the end at "with the losing gladiator waiting for their fate will be." There seems to be a missing "what" in the sentence. Corrected: "with the losing gladiator waiting for what their fate will be."

3. "Some of the posters would be repainted over to state the outcomes of the major events."

The statement "would be" should be changed to "were."