User:Adam9390/Battle of Edgar's Lane/Landon Thomas 23 Peer Review

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 * User:Adam9390/Battle of Edgar's Lane
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 * Battle of Edgar's Lane

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Sources: Overall, they look pretty solid if I were you, I would see if you can find any scholarly papers on this battle or or other papers that include this battle as they can help you lead to much more sources that will only make your article better.

Summary: The summary was overall solid as it gave the basic parts of this event and why it mattered. The only thing I could really think of is like you had put on there which is just more a little bit more information on the battle itself like who led the Hessians in the lead?

Background: I think you could really set up more about why this massacre led up to your battle of topic. I really like how you told some specifics on how they attacked and how many were affected by it, but I think you could dive more into this event to help set up the read and understand why this battle was necessary.

Setting: Overall there isn't much you can really do for setting, but you could maybe give some background on the town like why would the battle take place here and give more insight on how the town overall looked back then

Rest of Content: Most of your other content here was just copied and pasted from the other article, so I think if you could dive more onto the internet and just look for more sources, you can really dive deeper into this battle and give the reader something more than you have right now.

Overall, I think this is a decent start but really dive more into the why of this battle and try to look to go in as much depth as you possibly can when it comes to this battle like who were the people involved? What weapons did they use? What was different about this battle than the rest? Just answering a few of these questions in depth can really help your reader get a better understanding of your piece.