User:Adambletcher/Naked marriage in China/Xvclvx Peer Review

General info

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Adambletcher


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 * User:Adambletcher/Naked marriage in China


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 * User:Adambletcher/Naked marriage in China

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead is well-written to reflect the content of the topic. The Lead includes an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article’s topic. The brief description includes the major sections of the topic. Everything mentioned in the Lead is a part o the article. The Lead is concise and not overly detailed. It is a clear summary of the key points the article presents.

Content

The content is relevant to the topic and is up-to-date with references from recent times. The content in each section belongs there are are not misplaced. To support each section, perhaps add some recent examples in China. The article deals with Wikipedia’s equity gap, as it addresses the historically under-examined topic of men and female roles in Chinese marriage.

Tone and Balance

The content added is neutral, and that there are no climax that are heavily based toward a particular position. There are no viewpoints that are overrepresented or underrepresented. Also, the content does not persuade the reader to favour a position. The article is well-balanced with a suitable tone.

Sources and references

The content is, for the most part, supported by a reliable secondary source. Some statements could use some additional support. Also, the content accurately reflects the cited sources’ statements. The sources are thorough and reflect the topic. The sources are also current, especially matching the topic written on is current as well. The sources are written by many different authors, which add perspectives and colours to the article. The sources include historically marginalized individuals, and even articles from China. Hence, the article presents the topic not only through the lens of Western media and academics, but also through the media in China. The links work, and that additional sources to support the article is always encouraged.

Organization

The content is well-written, being concise, clear, and easy to read. There are minor grammatical errors, such as the use of the Oxford comma. However, these issues do not interfere with reading or understanding of the content. The content is well-organized and broken down into small, manageable sections.

Images and Media

There are no images and media used. However, the writers could consider adding these to enrich the article.

Overall impressions

The content definitely has improved the overall quality of the article. The article is more complete, with various sources from different angles to give colours. The strength of the content is that it is clear and concise, without bias to any side. To further improve the content, the writers can add in relevant images and media. Also, some statements could use additional support.