User:Adammilewski/Procession in St. Mark's Square/Venice Art Peer Review

General info
Adammillewski
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Adammilewski/Procession in St. Mark's Square
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Procession in St. Mark's Square

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

He did an excellent job with the revisions to the article to incorporate more artistic values and insights there. I like how he phrased the sentences to sound less like his opinion and more fact base (which is what you are supposed to do). He organized his topics well.

I would say Adam only needs to improve on spelling and making his sentences flow better. This would be fixed with a read through to see if there is a way to shorten longer sentences.

I think the way he organized the paper would be a good thing to follow, as it does not take away from other parts of the wikipedia page. He also added information to existing topics but underlined it so it is easy to follow.